Nothing wrong with offbeat so long as it's ontime
The offbeat works when used properly and you did it well here. :) The melodies are kinda repetitive as you don't really change em up. The way you drop out the melodies and go to just drums is a little bland too. Maybe use a freq. filt on your rhythm section and automate it in?
Some elevator type whooshes and woops would help transitions as well. :)
You know...you're actually right. The main problem I had with this song is that I only had 2 days to work on this for a final project so I rushed it and left it as is. If I had as much time as I did for Lounge Hop, I would have a completely different sound than the one that came out.
sounds a little thin at first
but I like how you use the thickening of the sound as a form of progression. it's simple yet effective.
kick could be a little thicker but all in all really nice melodies and excellent progression. :)
:o you actually commented on my song! I should consider myself honoured. :P thanks man :)!
Freaking LOVE the guitar patches you're using
And if that's real guitar, even better! :D I like the moody res pads you use at first. They set a nice ambience.
Great transitions and excellent melodic progression throughout.
Definitely a very moody piece, an emotional journey of a song.
The 2:49-end is epic. Sounds like it could be the bridge from a hugely successful club trance song. Excellent work here, man. :)
Only thing I wasn't a fan of was the use of rimshot, seemed a little loud. Besides that, way to go! :D
ya it was a guitar vst... i play real guitar... and im pretty good... 4 1/2 year years self taught.... but i dont have the money or equipment to hook it up to my comp...
and btw ty u so much for checking out my stuff :D ur music is so chill
nice harmonies and full sound but...
the pad you introduce at 0:28 has way too much res. not just personal taste dictating that either, it comes off way too sharp on the ears.
good rhythmic progression throughout, I like the new melody you introduce at a minute in. the lead you use immediately after is a bit too loud, watch yer levels! :D
I like the drop at 2:24, nice build up. -Love- the drum roll you do at 3:09, that's really sweet. :)
Tone down your high-ends and lead volumes a bit and this'd be much better. :) Good stuff otherwise, man!
Thanks dude. I'll fix some of the levels and do a re-upload tomorrow
Like a dark 'n dirty Marvin Gay song
Serious, you throw some deep, sexy vocals on there and then... wtf happened after a minute in? jesus christ. that was odd. a different song, really. lol, weird. -1 because of it!
Haha, the whole point of the song was to make something stupid that would make my friends laugh.
really nice layering
would agree with the others below that certain elements could be eq'd a bit sharper but I'm prone to leaving things gritty myself sometimes. all in all a very nice sound here, I used to love listening to this song at guvernment parties so maybe I'm biased. :D
really great progression though, I like how you drop around a minute in though the way you filter your hats in seem a little harsh on the ears, try playing with the res a bit more. :)
Thanks Durn i really appreciate it!! i will definitely take your advice and other users advice when i get back to this song! Ill try to improve my hi hats lol but thanks again!
great tune, man
very, very nice tune. but yes, it feels ambient still because your kick is lacking punch. whether it's the sample/synth you're using or lack of eq'ing/compression, it would be nice if the kick had a little more, well, kick to it. as it is it's kinda just thuddin' along. lack of hi-hats and other rhythmic elements also detract from the tune.
great melodic progression, absolutely wonderful headset and nice panning. this song totally deserves a 10 but as you said yourself, you need to get figurin' out the huge beat sound man! :D
very, very nice. :)
Thanks man! I'm really close to getting it. I found out that Its just my sound system thats making the bass sound way louder then it actually is. I'm trying to EQ it well and when i get that done il be able to get this song on the road.
all it's missing is singing :)
only thing holding me back from a 10. as epic as this was I think it woulda just been over the top if there'd been some nice singing as well. :)
really nice stuff, journey/story rock, I liked it a lot. :)
HaHaHa, I know, the problem with adding vocals at this instant is that my setup has messed up, so I can't fix or add anything until I fix the DAW. There will be vocals on this eventually, so stay tuned!
really nice piano :)
it always wins me. your subtle use of side-chaining is nice, adds a kinda driving-game feel to the song. :)
I think it woulda been nice if you'd side-chained your lead synth as well at some point. nice exploration here. :) I'm a huge fan of side-chaining and gating myself so it's always nice to hear other people trying it out too.
Maybe I will :\
This was just a test song. I may do more like this later.
ah, the 4 chord formula!! :D
at 1:22 you shoulda dropped the filter on your saw lead, I think, and let it build up slowly so it would seem like more of a break. have it peak when you bring the piano in, y'know?
a little more automation of elements between the addition of new layers would've been nice as it would've added to the build feel.
I really like the guitar you bring in at 3:00, sick sick sick turn to the song man. :)
takes a little too long to build for my tastes though. though the 80s style drums are fun around 4:00 in but they could pump a little more, they fall a little flat compared to your melodic elements.
I really liked the song, but I think if you'd kept it shorter and focused more on how you brought each layer in gradually it would've had more impact.
Ah thank you!
This is exactly the kind of criticism I want/need.
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